FAKE LATIN TITLE! YAY! Seriously not even close to real Latin. ANYWAY.
I created my own poetic fixed form for this piece. This was TOUGH. I wanted to do something that was a combination of haiku and vilanelle, and THIS is what I got.
For those who are interested, the structure is thus (note that I have followed the rules for haiku as far as syllables are concerned, therefore the syllable count is more of a guideline):
A (5 syllables)
B (7 syllables)
C (5 syllables)
A (or close variation, as you see above) (5)
X (5)
X (5)
B (7)
X (7)
X (7)
C (5)
X (5)
X (5)
X(5)
X (7)
Bv (7)
Cv (7)
A (5)
Xv indicates a variation on the wording of the line. Because of this, I am titling my poetic form "Variation on a Theme," 'cuz why the hell not? Please note: X simply means whatever line - it is a stand-in for "other line."
Here it is! Comments welcome, except I'm not going to change anything 'cuz this form is HARD TO USE.
"Microcosmia Universa"
Microcosmic:
prepare yourself for the plunge.
Now—take a deep breath.
A microcosm,
silent iceberg tip,
silent like stars.
Prepare yourself for the plunge.
Lacking the stamina of
sea lions, you may drown.
Now take a deep breath;
heart as nebula,
as hydrogen gas.
The oxygen leaves
lungs flat as comet tails.
Preparing for the plunge,
lacking air for a breath—
micro-cosmic.
I created my own poetic fixed form for this piece. This was TOUGH. I wanted to do something that was a combination of haiku and vilanelle, and THIS is what I got.
For those who are interested, the structure is thus (note that I have followed the rules for haiku as far as syllables are concerned, therefore the syllable count is more of a guideline):
A (5 syllables)
B (7 syllables)
C (5 syllables)
A (or close variation, as you see above) (5)
X (5)
X (5)
B (7)
X (7)
X (7)
C (5)
X (5)
X (5)
X(5)
X (7)
Bv (7)
Cv (7)
A (5)
Xv indicates a variation on the wording of the line. Because of this, I am titling my poetic form "Variation on a Theme," 'cuz why the hell not? Please note: X simply means whatever line - it is a stand-in for "other line."
Here it is! Comments welcome, except I'm not going to change anything 'cuz this form is HARD TO USE.
"Microcosmia Universa"
Microcosmic:
prepare yourself for the plunge.
Now—take a deep breath.
A microcosm,
silent iceberg tip,
silent like stars.
Prepare yourself for the plunge.
Lacking the stamina of
sea lions, you may drown.
Now take a deep breath;
heart as nebula,
as hydrogen gas.
The oxygen leaves
lungs flat as comet tails.
Preparing for the plunge,
lacking air for a breath—
micro-cosmic.
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